I'm not very good at writing but the grammar and typos took me out of the mood your story was trying to tell quite often. Vinny becomes Victor at some point - the name in the text doesn't match the character's name and it became slightly confusing. Maybe it's just a nickname? Otherwise there is a lot of passion in this project which is wonderful. There is some very nice atmosphere besides graphics to be explored and the music was great to experience together in your Game Jam.
Horrible grammar and meaningful choices only appear at the end of the game cause of random plot twist. I really adore graphics and I could see the concept, but I feel like game was pretty rushed and had more potential than it was used to.3/10
Spelling mistakes galore and it made it very hard to play.
You are = you're = this is what is used when you want to describe someone doing something. "You are going to do my bidding for me", etc etc Your - belonging to you - "your dog"
So in a sentence like "your Anarchs, I presume?" I am assuming that you are gesturing at a single person and asking them if that group of Anarchs to the side belongs to them.
We're = we are = something that you use to denote doing something. "We are going to go to the bar!"
were = happened in the past. "The workers were working, but now it is their break time".
I've noticed some other things here and there, such as "splashs" instead of "splashes". You really need to proofread this and fix it up before the deadline.
Other than that, the game is of a decent length, the music is well chosen, the whole thing looks gorgeous. It is obvious you poured your heart and soul into it. Good job!
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I'm not very good at writing but the grammar and typos took me out of the mood your story was trying to tell quite often. Vinny becomes Victor at some point - the name in the text doesn't match the character's name and it became slightly confusing. Maybe it's just a nickname?
Otherwise there is a lot of passion in this project which is wonderful. There is some very nice atmosphere besides graphics to be explored and the music was great to experience together in your Game Jam.
Horrible grammar and meaningful choices only appear at the end of the game cause of random plot twist. I really adore graphics and I could see the concept, but I feel like game was pretty rushed and had more potential than it was used to.3/10
Spelling mistakes galore and it made it very hard to play.
You are = you're = this is what is used when you want to describe someone doing something. "You are going to do my bidding for me", etc etc
Your - belonging to you - "your dog"
So in a sentence like "your Anarchs, I presume?" I am assuming that you are gesturing at a single person and asking them if that group of Anarchs to the side belongs to them.
We're = we are = something that you use to denote doing something. "We are going to go to the bar!"
were = happened in the past. "The workers were working, but now it is their break time".
I've noticed some other things here and there, such as "splashs" instead of "splashes". You really need to proofread this and fix it up before the deadline.
Other than that, the game is of a decent length, the music is well chosen, the whole thing looks gorgeous. It is obvious you poured your heart and soul into it. Good job!